NaPoWriMo #11

The Way It Isn’t

The woman, I never met her,
lives in the house I’ve never owned
with children she never bore me
in a town where I’ve never been.

Their absence doesn’t affect me
except when I’m where I’ve not gone.
Then I recall problems I’m spared
because I’m not even half there.

Loss

The pain
prompts
retreat
to earth
or hope
of breath
returning
to sky.

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8 thoughts on “NaPoWriMo #11

  1. Wow! Just read “The Way It Isn’t.” Found it quite haunting. “Their absence doesn’t affect me / except when I’m where I’ve not gone”…love these lines.

  2. Your linguistic dexterity stars again! For consideration: In my humble opinion, “except when I’m where I’ve not gone.” is begging to be the last line. The two that follow it seem anti-climactic. And, as always, you’re very welcome to critique my stuff, too. Cheers, Matt. Rock on! =)

  3. This reminds me of Talking Heads, “Once in a Lifetime”, though yours is clearly much more serious and thoughtful. But still, as much as we think about alternative choices, wouldn’t it be strange to wake up and find out they were true? Good stuff!

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