What have we
in common
but the moon
rising and falling
over horizons?
Even our seasons
slide out of sync,
I summer in your chill
and we wish
on different stars
yet we make verses,
divided evenly
between us,
multiplied
in a mystery
creating our own
field of stars.
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“I summer in your chill” that’s a great line. This piece is sweetly romantic. It gave a smile to my morning.
Thanks for sharing.
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My fav topic… Sweet and lyrical too~
“Even our seasons
slide out of sync,
I summer in your chill
and we wish
on different stars.”
lovely ~
Very nice. I just love the second stanza, but great lines throughout.
This has to be one of the most romantic and the sweetest things I’ve ever read. I’m pretty sure the person you wrote this poem to received it with a big smile and felt embraced by your love. This is adorable, Matt. ❤
Love the second stanza. The mood of physical longing yet united in creative spirit so evident in just these few lines.
Such loveliness.
Love the second verse. I hope your love is coming to you soon 🙂
You know, I like most everything about this. You have some really good ideas, and images. The moon (maybe your moon rises as hers falls, or vice versa), seasons out of synch, summer/winter, different stars. The only reservation I have, and this is on a theoretical level, because I really do love it, is the fact that you ask, what do we have in common, then you tell us about the moon, then you tell us more things you don’t have in common. My point is, I wonder if it would be possible to move the moon to later in the poem, along with all the stuff that you do have in common? It just seems that the poem would be better organized in two parts. You know, 1. it seems we have nothing in common, because of x y and z, 2. but in reality we have the moon, etc. You have some really nice sentiments here, and I wouldn’t want to screw the poem up by tinkering too much. Anyway, it’s just an idea. BTW, maybe you want to check out my new poem at my blog below?
Another great write. Love through the eyes of another how we all long for it!
Mmm, the mystery of love. And I, being a moonbridge, am in love with the first line.
Thanks for the comments! I appreciate them all!
Yeah a mystery it is and so shall remain. Love the play on split evenly between us and then multiplied directly after.
I just read this again, and I’m glad you haven’t changed it. I like it as it is. This really is a nice poem.
Hi! I love the second stanza, as many wrote before me. I also really like the third –
“yet we make verses… / multiplied / in a mystery” – ❤ loved that! It leaves a mystery for me to think about.
Thank you for sharing 🙂
Debbie
painted upon the skies
your wonder
in a brilliant
bounty of
words that reach deep inside
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just beautiful Matt